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| Re: Pink? Why Pink? [message #59485 is a reply to message #50401 ] |
Wed, 06 June 2012 06:42   |
Niknokitueu
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Registered: May 2011
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Heh. It's back with a new entry.
Love him talking to his 'inner girl'. Can't wait to see what develops.
Have Fun!
Niknokitueu
Do, or Do Not. There is no Try.
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| Re: Pink? Why Pink? [message #59566 is a reply to message #59521 ] |
Fri, 08 June 2012 09:19 |
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 beyogi
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Registered: May 2011
Location: Germany |
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| Niknokitueu wrote on Thu, 07 June 2012 13:08 | | beyogi wrote on Wed, 06 June 2012 20:26 | | Niknokitueu wrote on Wed, 06 June 2012 12:42 | Heh. It's back with a new entry.
Love him talking to his 'inner girl'. Can't wait to see what develops.
Have Fun!
Niknokitueu
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Well maybe s/he'll get late revenge for her passenger.
I like this story so far, quicker updates would be nice though 
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Shh! I think the Author is listening...
I don't know about anyone else, but for me the penny dropped when she visualised the pink forklift.
"In brightest day, in blackest night..."
Have Fun!
Niknokitueu
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Sheesh, what is happening? I figured I needed to look maybe next week again, but there were three updates already!
Great story btw. I'm not sure if I like the mental rewiring thing, but considering she's an avatar it probably makes sense. I wonder where this is going. I mean she might end up like a pink fey, the perfect girly girl - shudder.
The MCO might decide they want to be trouble, so there might be some action...
Thank you for writing, I'd really like to read the next chapter.
Never think to have thought, since the thinking of thoughts is thoughtless thinking.
You think!
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| Re: Pink? Why Pink? [message #59572 is a reply to message #59566 ] |
Fri, 08 June 2012 14:55 |
AndreaRibeiro
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Registered: May 2011
Location: Sao Paulo, Brazil |
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| beyogi wrote on Fri, 08 June 2012 10:19 |
Sheesh, what is happening? I figured I needed to look maybe next week again, but there were three updates already!
Great story btw. I'm not sure if I like the mental rewiring thing, but considering she's an avatar it probably makes sense. I wonder where this is going. I mean she might end up like a pink fey, the perfect girly girl - shudder.
The MCO might decide they want to be trouble, so there might be some action...
Thank you for writing, I'd really like to read the next chapter.
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I'm glad you are enjoying this little tale of mine. I how to keep the updates more constant now. Ever since I got my Samsung Galaxy 7" tablet it has been easier to write whenever the inspiration hit.
Right now I'm working on part 11 and hope to have it up tomorrow or so, unless something happens and I end up posting tonight.
Hugs,
Andrea.
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| Re: Pink? Why Pink? [message #59664 is a reply to message #59572 ] |
Sun, 10 June 2012 10:42 |
Isodecan
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Registered: May 2011
Location: Fort Worth, TX |
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As expected, the MCO shows up before they can get Melody to the police station to get her MID, however, since they are still looking for Mark, and asked for him, I think she will be able to make a clean getaway.
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| Re: Pink? Why Pink? [message #59718 is a reply to message #59716 ] |
Mon, 11 June 2012 02:04 |
Mr Pumblechook
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Registered: May 2011 |
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Hmm... I like the story a lot.
However, it may be just me, but this last episode doesn't seem to ring true. The problem is with the MCO agent. He comes across as a bit too much keystone kops.
The MCO should be a lot more scary and willing and able to throw their weight around, and the cops seem far too mutant friendly for the usual Whateleyverse setup, and they MCO does usually have at least some legal authority. They were too easy to stonewall and there was no sense of dramatic tension or fear/anxiety.
Also, I suspect they (the MCO) should be operating in pairs. (Two by two, hands of blue...)
Getting around them by having them looking for a boy and finding a girl, and then the friendly cop arriving and easing them out might work better.
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| Re: Pink? Why Pink? [message #59719 is a reply to message #50401 ] |
Mon, 11 June 2012 02:15 |
brooke erickson
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Registered: May 2011 |
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I like the MCO getting caught out by folks knowing their rights and the *legal* limits on what the MCO can do.
In answer to the objections above, do note that it's been mentioned a number of times that the MCO *doesn't* have nearly as much *actual* authority as they like to pretend, but tend to get buy by acting as if they have the authority for things.
As for the cops, different departments react differently. Consider the way different police departments treat GLBT folks. Some are "you must be doing something wrong or these fine citizens wouldn't have attacked you" others are "Are these bigots bothering you?"
One glitch in the latest post. The author has confused two similar phrases with exactly opposite meanings.
"Under the radar" (or "flying under the radar") comes from the practice of flying close to the ground so that radar can't see you.
"On the radar" (sometimes "on their radar") means you've been spotted/noticed.
Melody is *on* the MCO's "radar", not "under" it.
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| Re: Pink? Why Pink? [message #59722 is a reply to message #59719 ] |
Mon, 11 June 2012 02:54 |
Mr Pumblechook
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Registered: May 2011 |
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True, it just felt a little... blase about the whole thing. Working in a little more tension would feel better.
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| Re: Pink? Why Pink? [message #59723 is a reply to message #59722 ] |
Mon, 11 June 2012 03:19 |
brooke erickson
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Registered: May 2011 |
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| Mr Pumblechook wrote on Mon, 11 June 2012 02:54 |
True, it just felt a little... blase about the whole thing. Working in a little more tension would feel better.
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Living in a city where the police department has had a monthly "roundtable" meeting with the "alternative lifestyles" folks for over a decade to insure that the cops understand where the gay & kinky folks are coming from and that the gays etc understand where the cops are coming from has spoiled me. Especially given that attitudes the cops tended to have a dozen years before that.
Sure, given the way the Whateleyverse is set up, it won't be common, but it won't be unheard of either.
The trick for the poor mutant is figuring out if the locals actually mean it or are just trying to sound good.
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