| Re: Still MORE Fey fan art. [message #35761 is a reply to message #35732 ] |
Mon, 13 April 2009 10:41   |
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| lbmaian wrote on Sun, 12 April 2009 22:57 |
I like  Love the concept and her pose. The coloring, as always, is pretty nice.
Critique:
1) Her left eye (on the right side of the picture) seems slightly too high, giving her a hint of a quixotic expression.
2) I'm surprised how much you toned down the breasts 
3) The torso (from the hips to the bust line) is too long. In fact, it makes her arms look too short.
4) The lips...well you already know.
5) Her hair has weird highlights. It just doesn't look like realistic lighting.
Also, I'm not sure if her eyes actually glow when she's magicking the place up, but it would like really cool if they were - a magic aura around her would be spiffy too
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Glad you at least like the attempt. 
1) Yeah. Yeah...it is a little high isn't it. Phooey. Oh well I kind of like the mildly crazed look it gives her. Still I need to watch for that.
2) Well I CAN draw smaller breasts, but as they say "Why eat hamburger when you can have steak?" No. I actually drew this in a public place surrounded by kids. I finished it up at home and could have (and considered)making her tits bigger but I really liked how the shape turned out so I decided "Why mess it up."
3) I have problems with that. Always have. I'll just keep working on it.
4) Puffy lips are sexy! :raspberry:
5) Really? I actually liked how the hair turned out. I mean I could have cut it up with the smudge tool a bit (and probably should have. Oh well.) but all in all the thought it worked well. Could you give me a little more information about what exactly the problem is as you see it?
I would also like to say that I find it very funny that I have gotten far more constructive criticism here than any where else I have posted my art. Please keep it up.
~Matt
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| Re: Fey fan art [message #35764 is a reply to message #35762 ] |
Mon, 13 April 2009 11:56 |
VeryZenn
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Yeah. After reading your sig and getting a little deeper into the story I thought it was time for Nikki's Tempestuous side.
I'm glad you like them. There will be more. I may do an Ayla pic next...we'll see.
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| Re: Still MORE Fey fan art. [message #35779 is a reply to message #35761 ] |
Mon, 13 April 2009 14:27 |
lbmaian
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5) Really? I actually liked how the hair turned out. I mean I could have cut it up with the smudge tool a bit (and probably should have. Oh well.) but all in all the thought it worked well. Could you give me a little more information about what exactly the problem is as you see it?
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Well, I might have been too harsh given your art style, but highlights are supposed to strictly follow the hair line consistently, not a smudging approximation of it. In the pic, I see the highlights of some hair lines crossing into other hair lines that were previously not highlighted. I just don't think smudging is a good way to color in highlights. Other than that though, the hair is great.
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I'm not an artist, can't even draw decent stick figures *grin* so don't critique artwork unless it's to say I do or don't like it.
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I'm not an artist either, but Ayla didn't need to be a cook to be able to critique those cooks
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| Re: Still MORE Fey fan art. [message #35799 is a reply to message #35779 ] |
Mon, 13 April 2009 16:46 |
VeryZenn
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| lbmaian wrote on Mon, 13 April 2009 14:27 |
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5) Really? I actually liked how the hair turned out. I mean I could have cut it up with the smudge tool a bit (and probably should have. Oh well.) but all in all the thought it worked well. Could you give me a little more information about what exactly the problem is as you see it?
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Well, I might have been too harsh given your art style, but highlights are supposed to strictly follow the hair line consistently, not a smudging approximation of it. In the pic, I see the highlights of some hair lines crossing into other hair lines that were previously not highlighted. I just don't think smudging is a good way to color in highlights. Other than that though, the hair is great.
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I'm not an artist, can't even draw decent stick figures *grin* so don't critique artwork unless it's to say I do or don't like it.
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I'm not an artist either, but Ayla didn't need to be a cook to be able to critique those cooks
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AH! Ok. I see what you're saying. The lighter portions of her hair arn't IN the hair (as they would be if her hair had lighter streaks in it) but rather a result of the bottom lighting. Honestly it could still use work but at least now I know what the problem was. Thanks.
~Matt
Got it in one Anvildude!
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| Re: Fey fan art [message #36700 is a reply to message #36690 ] |
Sun, 19 April 2009 14:59 |
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I like it. I guess it does look a bit Masonic, though. Little suggestion: Keep the square, but instead of the compass, make it a brush (paintbrush) and a pen or pencil, for the legs. The tip could be a stylized gear, maybe? and use a wing motif for the border of the shield, maybe. If you really want to get fancy, put a sunburst emanating from the lamp. Keep the lamp though. Definitely keep the lamp. My though is, since it's a school (Not a mutant school to the general public, so keep that toned down) the Pen/pencil represents language, the Brush represents creativity and the square and/or gear represent technology, with the lamp and possible sunburst representing the learning aspect. The wings around the edge would be, like Sir Lee said, representative of 'flying higher' and 'reaching for the heavens' as well as giving that idea of slightly more than human, to those in the know.
Heh, for a school motto, how's this, (translated into Latin, of course): Knowledge is Power. That would be, what, [Knowledge] est Potestas?
It's a sad thing when your paraphrase is longer than the original quote.
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| Re: Fey fan art [message #36724 is a reply to message #36700 ] |
Sun, 19 April 2009 16:47 |
lbmaian
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| Anvildude wrote on Sun, 19 April 2009 13:59 |
I like it. I guess it does look a bit Masonic, though. Little suggestion: Keep the square, but instead of the compass, make it a brush (paintbrush) and a pen or pencil, for the legs. The tip could be a stylized gear, maybe? and use a wing motif for the border of the shield, maybe. If you really want to get fancy, put a sunburst emanating from the lamp. Keep the lamp though. Definitely keep the lamp. My though is, since it's a school (Not a mutant school to the general public, so keep that toned down) the Pen/pencil represents language, the Brush represents creativity and the square and/or gear represent technology, with the lamp and possible sunburst representing the learning aspect. The wings around the edge would be, like Sir Lee said, representative of 'flying higher' and 'reaching for the heavens' as well as giving that idea of slightly more than human, to those in the know.
Heh, for a school motto, how's this, (translated into Latin, of course): Knowledge is Power. That would be, what, [Knowledge] est Potestas?
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scientia potestas est?
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| Re: Fey fan art [message #37026 is a reply to message #36654 ] |
Tue, 21 April 2009 22:34 |
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Given the fact Whateley is a New England school founded over a hundred years ago I think it would be a little odd or suspicious if there wasn't Masonic symbols in the school crest. Also the Lamp(light, life, spirituality), and the Compass and Square(movement toward perfection and a balance between the spiritual and physical) are pretty standard school related symbols in America, especially in New England and the original 13 states.
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