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| Re: Synthaera (post crash) [message #46012 is a reply to message #46011 ] |
Fri, 23 September 2011 14:45   |
 blayze
Messages: 30
Registered: May 2011
Location: Durham, UK |
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Heya Beyogi, glad you enjoyed the new chapter. Who said anything about them being training robots? With a name like Devastators?
Nah, they are equipment that has been 'acquired' by Whateley. After all all that salvage from super powered terrosrism and combat has to go somewhere. And if you thought the first devastator was bad, how is Syn gonna cope with Overload out cold? After all it was Overload who fried the first one....
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| Re: Synthaera (post crash) [message #46015 is a reply to message #46009 ] |
Fri, 23 September 2011 14:50 |
blayze
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Registered: May 2011
Location: Durham, UK |
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I suspect that someone maybe just thatought they could have the Arena on oversight and everything would be fine..., after all with live ammo they could use the droids on the live fire exercises for any of Whateleys heavy hitters, still you gotta think that someone has been really careless...
Glad you are still enjoying the story Isodecan. Thanks for reading.
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| Re: Synthaera (post crash) [message #46017 is a reply to message #39972 ] |
Fri, 23 September 2011 15:57 |
thejackle123
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Registered: August 2011 |
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I'm pretty sure that syntheses can handle the robot, so far she been holding back but I don't think she even needs to use 'that', from what I can tell her magic attacks arnt projectile based so simple she can use them and completely bypass any shielding, she's been doing it with her shields already, physical or energy and just destroy the insides.
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| Re: Synthaera (post crash) [message #46025 is a reply to message #46015 ] |
Fri, 23 September 2011 18:37 |
brooke erickson
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Registered: May 2011 |
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| blayze wrote on Fri, 23 September 2011 14:50 | I suspect that someone maybe just thatought they could have the Arena on oversight and everything would be fine..., after all with live ammo they could use the droids on the live fire exercises for any of Whateleys heavy hitters, still you gotta think that someone has been really careless...
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Uh, no. First rule is that training scenarios do not *ever* allow real ammo.
If you were going to run a scenario for folks for whom that live ammo was "safe" for training, you'd load it *specifically* for that scenario and be sure that all of the rounds were removed at the end of the session.
Likewise, the second Devastator, given that a tech was working on it, should have had *hard* lockouts (as in not merely switched off power runs, but physically locked out (as in real locked preventing the switches from being thrown or the cables from being plugged back in.
That's standard and *required* safety for working an any sort of heavy equipment where you could get hurt if power came on while you were in the way.
The software overrides an different (and excusable) situation.
But both the live ammo being in the 'bot, and the second one being *able* to leave the repair bay it was in show *major* violations of basic safety protocols. The sort of thing that will get those responsible fired if no one is injured and there's no damage to anything.
With the tech dead and the kids in danger, you are talking about things that will get people arrested and charged with serious crimes. Criminal negligence for starters and manslaughter for the dead tech.
Some folks are looking at serious jail time here.
This is not an "oops, somebody goofed" situation. It's a "heads will roll" (perhaps literally) situation.
Carson is going to go ballistic. And if there's s shred of evidence that there was deliberate sabotage involved, Delarose will be hunting heads too.
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| Re: Synthaera (post crash) [message #46166 is a reply to message #39972 ] |
Sat, 01 October 2011 05:10 |
blayze
Messages: 30
Registered: May 2011
Location: Durham, UK |
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Hello, one and all.
Been reading all the comments about chapter 10, it looks like I have taken some major liberties with health and safety! Confession time. It never really occurred to me. My bad.
The devastators that Whateley has are second hand not straight off the production line.
Chapter 10 and 11 have been difficult to write, and all I can say is that the canon team have my sincere respect for keeping the WU as consistent as they have managed to. I know they probably have a lot of interaction between themselves which helps but even so, major kudos to all of you. Personally I find making Syn fit into the constraints of the canon WU hard as hell but I'll keep trying to do so.
I may revisit chap 10 to try and tidy up some of the bits of stretching believability too far, but no promises, and atm i will just hide behind the old fire wall of artistic licence. So there. he he. As always thanks for reading, Im glad you're enjoying it, and please please keep up with the feedback. Every comment I get is a boost, (just cos I got a comment!) Later.
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| Re: Synthaera (post crash) [message #46168 is a reply to message #46166 ] |
Sat, 01 October 2011 11:57 |
Isodecan
Messages: 843
Registered: May 2011
Location: Fort Worth, TX |
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I think you can get away with it if you make Lt. Trout the guilty party, and have him take the fall.
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| Re: Synthaera (post crash) [message #46643 is a reply to message #46642 ] |
Wed, 12 October 2011 17:28 |
Macavity
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Registered: June 2011 |
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I think you did great with this chapter action! And the insinuation of an evil plotter, thwarted by chance, is a great support for the alarming firepower.
However, you need to pay attention, and avoid mutating your character into a ridiculously powerful being.
I see her strength, and appeal, in her interaction with friends and foes. She is more confident, and less cynical, than Ayla. And so, she is unique. You can have much more to expose your character to than battles.
Of course, the occasional adrenaline boost from walloping bad guys, is welcome.
And for the safety critics: the "don't worry, you can count on me" approach can be found everywhere. It does collide with the anal description of Mr. Anderson, but it could have led to the control center situation.
And slip-ups happen. Both in training, and in real action situations. Veterans are not immune to it. In fact they are prone to underestimate out-of-action situations. Unless they're Delarose, or similarly forward looking individuals...
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| Re: Synthaera (post crash) [message #46646 is a reply to message #46639 ] |
Wed, 12 October 2011 17:45 |
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Nicky82
Messages: 1402
Registered: May 2011 |
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Good work, dude.
If a character pulls out something completely new without explaination is an Asspull, you basically did the same thing apllied to litterature.... and let me tell you, you did a excelent job at it.
| beyogi wrote on Wed, 12 October 2011 19:59 | I wonder why hera is so unimpressed. Syn may very well be more powerful than her.
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Two reason:
- Experience trumps raw power (especially true with magic)
- Overinflated ego
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