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Re: Faolan Discussion [message #56217 is a reply to message #56209] Sun, 01 April 2012 12:05 Go to previous messageGo to next message
Insane Hiker is currently offline  Insane Hiker
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Unless this is an April Fool's post. Even by Insane Hikers standard the power level was a bit excessive and diverging really far from Canon.


Yes and no, in this case the joke was mostly on me, to tell you all the truth is I've been feeling really burned out after finishing Faolan 4 and was just refusing to see it. Sad

I wonder if I could ask the mods to take it down, if not please consider this a excessively dirty alpha version of the real story, whenever I can do it justice I'll use it to write over this embarrassment.
Re: Faolan Discussion [message #56231 is a reply to message #42912] Sun, 01 April 2012 15:28 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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The best approach is to write at your own speed, and don't feel you have to publish as soon as you've finished scribbling down the story. One approach would be to do as the canon authors do - find someone willing to be an editor, who could work with you to tidy up / neaten your writing. Not all editors are of the "here's a 3 page list of all the spelling / grammatical errors, and here's a 3 page list of all the plot points I didn't like" ilk!
Re: Faolan Discussion [message #56234 is a reply to message #56231] Sun, 01 April 2012 16:16 Go to previous messageGo to next message
Insane Hiker is currently offline  Insane Hiker
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I know that, heck I didn't finish my second story until after The Crash wiped out the first, it was sitting around half-completed for a year. I didn't want that to happen again so basically this began as an attempt to plow through a writer's block but turned into a shark-jumping train wreck. Even I could see the problems that were happening with the story about a week ago but I thought that given the time of year that I'd post it anyway to deflate my ego a little.

Still this joke has given me a chance to test some ideas and see what won't work out in the final story. Anyway I'll blank this mess out at the end of the day and leave the post open for a real story later, read it for a laugh just don't take it too seriously. As for Alethea you will be seeing her eventually, but only when I can tell the story in a manner that does it justice.
Re: Faolan Discussion [message #56270 is a reply to message #56234] Mon, 02 April 2012 05:23 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Insane Hiker wrote on Sun, 01 April 2012 22:16
I know that, heck I didn't finish my second story until after The Crash wiped out the first, it was sitting around half-completed for a year. I didn't want that to happen again so basically this began as an attempt to plow through a writer's block but turned into a shark-jumping train wreck. Even I could see the problems that were happening with the story about a week ago but I thought that given the time of year that I'd post it anyway to deflate my ego a little.

Still this joke has given me a chance to test some ideas and see what won't work out in the final story. Anyway I'll blank this mess out at the end of the day and leave the post open for a real story later, read it for a laugh just don't take it too seriously. As for Alethea you will be seeing her eventually, but only when I can tell the story in a manner that does it justice.


Shit I didn't read you april's fool story yesterday... Could you post it here again?
An editor can really help, especially when they tell you something doesn't fit, sucks or is boring.


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[Updated on: Mon, 02 April 2012 05:25]

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Re: Faolan Discussion [message #56861 is a reply to message #42912] Mon, 16 April 2012 06:17 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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I was thinking about what was said in the last chapter of the main Faolan arc, there would be four maidens having ties to both the court of the center and one of the cardinal courts that would open the way to the restoration of the Five Fold Court, Faolan is the one of the Western Court, it was hinted that there is a dragon girl enslaved by a warlock that must be saved by the Handmaid of the Tao, most likely being the Maiden of the North, than there is Mrs Carson's new daughter that is supposed to be the Maiden of the East..... I was wondering if the woman that is pregnant from Seth is going to give birth the the Maiden of the South.
Re: Faolan Discussion [message #56958 is a reply to message #42912] Wed, 18 April 2012 04:10 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Hiker, are you still around?
Re: Faolan Discussion [message #56960 is a reply to message #56958] Wed, 18 April 2012 08:29 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Hiker, are you still around?
Yes sorry for taking so long to answer. The lady in San Fran is the Maiden of the North; however she just needs to be escorted to Whateley at this point. I have been trying to write the story of her manifestation and capture, as well as the next Faolan story which will tell the 'real story' of the Eastern Maiden's birth, but have come up with less success. Yes Miranda Salazar's future daughter is very likely to be the Southern Maiden.

On the note of the Eastern Maiden, I have also rewritten the scene with Tiamat and Greyback in Faolan 2 part 5 to reflect some of the changes to the story which I feel will make the final narrative less forced. I am working on the next story now, it's just coming a bit more slowly than I'd like, it will also be a lot longer than the April Fool's short story.

[Updated on: Wed, 18 April 2012 11:44]

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Re: Faolan Discussion [message #56965 is a reply to message #56861] Wed, 18 April 2012 14:50 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Nicky82 wrote on Mon, 16 April 2012 12:17
I was thinking about what was said in the last chapter of the main Faolan arc, there would be four maidens having ties to both the court of the center and one of the cardinal courts that would open the way to the restoration of the Five Fold Court, Faolan is the one of the Western Court, it was hinted that there is a dragon girl enslaved by a warlock that must be saved by the Handmaid of the Tao, most likely being the Maiden of the North, than there is Mrs Carson's new daughter that is supposed to be the Maiden of the East..... I was wondering if the woman that is pregnant from Seth is going to give birth the the Maiden of the South.

Didn't the Groove call Toni the Dragon Rider or something like that? Maybe you could have Toni help the Handmaid, so she gets her dragon? Very Happy


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Re: Faolan Discussion [message #56978 is a reply to message #56965] Wed, 18 April 2012 23:55 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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I was thinking about what was said in the last chapter of the main Faolan arc, there would be four maidens having ties to both the court of the center and one of the cardinal courts that would open the way to the restoration of the Five Fold Court, Faolan is the one of the Western Court, it was hinted that there is a dragon girl enslaved by a warlock that must be saved by the Handmaid of the Tao, most likely being the Maiden of the North, than there is Mrs Carson's new daughter that is supposed to be the Maiden of the East..... I was wondering if the woman that is pregnant from Seth is going to give birth the the Maiden of the South.


Didn't the Groove call Toni the Dragon Rider or something like that? Maybe you could have Toni help the Handmaid, so she gets her dragon? Very Happy


I think that you meant The Grove, I'm pretty sure the only Groove Toni is concerned with is her own. However the maidens are all half-breeds either born or changed by circumstances or fate, so the Northern Maiden is not a full blown dragon (I haven't even said what kind of dragon yet), plus Rip would get pretty pissed if she caught Toni trying to ride another girl behind her back. Wink Speaking of the Northern Maiden if anyone reading is from Seattle, I could use your help when writing this one, mainly local attitudes and info.

The where's and when's said during where it talks about the Northern Maiden will help you figure out the identity of the second character. (If you want to send me your guess then please, PM it to me so that you don't spoil it for those who want to wait for the reveal)

[Updated on: Sat, 21 April 2012 22:12]

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Re: Faolan Discussion [message #57077 is a reply to message #56978] Sat, 21 April 2012 22:15 Go to previous messageGo to next message
Insane Hiker is currently offline  Insane Hiker
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Well my muse is starting to come out of hibernation and I hope that this will shape up to be a better story this time around than my April Fool's post.
Re: Faolan Discussion [message #57169 is a reply to message #57077] Mon, 23 April 2012 03:33 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Insane Hiker wrote on Sun, 22 April 2012 04:15
Well my muse is starting to come out of hibernation and I hope that this will shape up to be a better story this time around than my April Fool's post.


Well... it'S a great story so far. I wonder who was that prisoner in the beginning.

Thank you for writing, I can't wait for the next part.


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Re: Faolan Discussion [message #57178 is a reply to message #57169] Mon, 23 April 2012 06:43 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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beyogi wrote on Mon, 23 April 2012 09:33
Insane Hiker wrote on Sun, 22 April 2012 04:15
Well my muse is starting to come out of hibernation and I hope that this will shape up to be a better story this time around than my April Fool's post.


Well... it'S a great story so far. I wonder who was that prisoner in the beginning.

Thank you for writing, I can't wait for the next part.

Tiamiat's daughter, the jailer was Aphrodite/Venus, a.k.a. the dreadspawn using her as disguise.

I wonder what the Obsidian Circle's ultimate agenda is and why they want the loyalty of the four cardinal maidens.
Re: Faolan Discussion [message #57194 is a reply to message #57178] Mon, 23 April 2012 13:23 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Um, not the Dreadspawn, after posting The Dark Daughter I took a second look at it and realized that the GOO anchor idea didn't work out so well for the overall narrative for this story, so I re-edited the previous stories to remove it (it was only in one scene of Faolan 2 so you might want to reread the Tiamat scene there). I know I hate it when authors do that myself, the fact of the matter was it not only didn't work out too well, plus the Dreadspawn was Cythlla and constantly referring to a major plot point by euphemisms (she's not PD) got to be annoying.

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Re: Faolan Discussion [message #57276 is a reply to message #42912] Wed, 25 April 2012 03:48 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Ok, so admittedly the 'real' version isn't as exciting and action-packed as the spoof, but on the other hand it's far more plausible and you've still managed to pack in the major milestones.

Meanwhile, it appears as though Liz has been the only person to handle the "pearl" directly, so it's still possible she's going to have an unexpected new "daughter"...

...who she'll make absolutely darn sure has minimal contact with the Obsidian Circle before she appears to be 18 (I say "appears to be" because if, as with the spoof, the "daughter" experiences rapid growth and 'hatches' with the appearance of a teenager, she'll probably be considered one even though technically she's 0 - a similar kind of setup to Belfy in canon)
Re: Faolan Discussion [message #57432 is a reply to message #57276] Sun, 29 April 2012 02:37 Go to previous messageGo to previous message
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More reminders that while the circle may not be working for the Mythos, they are definitely bad guys. Also, sounds like there is going to be a chinese fire drill what with everybody and their cousin trying to steal the pearl while it is being transported.
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