| Faolan Discussion [message #42912] |
Wed, 29 June 2011 20:24  |
 Isodecan
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While I don't think anything like the Obsidian Circle exists in Canon, and for that matter, the Grand Hall of Sinister Wisdom doesn't seem to be as powerful or pervasive as your version, I like what you are doing with the group. They are evil, at least by current standards, but they also oppose the Great Old Ones, and they are planning for the war that they know is coming. Faolan and Morrigan are also proving to be an interesting combination of characters.
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| Re: Faolan Discussion [message #42923 is a reply to message #42912 ] |
Wed, 29 June 2011 22:51  |
Insane Hiker
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The way I see it the Grand Hall of Sinister Wisdom is far from united like The Syndicate and are more like a franchise operation. Erzabet Scratch is like someone who has either bought out or founded several franchises to become like a regional manager, who wants to run things her way, especially since her way ensures the survival of her growing extended family. The Obsidian Circle in this model are more like the original board of directors, just look at what happens to a lot of corporations after the founders of the company leave.
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| Re: Faolan Discussion [message #42960 is a reply to message #42923 ] |
Thu, 30 June 2011 21:34 |
Isodecan
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I hadn't reread the 1st part before reading the 2nd, but I decided to, since there were a few things I wasn't clear on. There seem to be a few discrepancies between the two, although that might be because of people lying. In particular:| Faolan or Exorcizing That Inner Demon | As if responding to some silent cue, the Beast now came forward, and for the first time that I had been aware of him as anything more than a nightmare in the normal sense of the word, spoke, "Like the whelp I would also like to keep any semblance of my true identity a secret as to also protect the true identity of my master; however, the last time that I was in his presence he gave me another name with which to call myself in this modern age, Carcharoth!"
"So be it, the lots for this Fehde have been cast, none my surrender or throw in their fate with the other side without there being consequences from this point forward," proclaimed the Adjudicator. "Now, Carcharoth, as the one challenged in this Fehde, you shall receive the first choice of the method for combat; although you must keep in mind that should any of the other side refuse you shall revoke your right to refuse their counter offer."
"Very well," the demonic anthropomorphic beast agreed. "I chose force; let might make right."
"We decline," Greyback proclaimed, "When you first attacked us fourteen winters ago, your first action was to devour the spirit of our pack's beta spirit as he was healing from wounds that you inflicted upon him earlier. The name that he had chosen for himself since The Fall was even unknown to us as your earlier attack had striped him of the ability to speak; he represented raw power amongst our group."
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and later on in Faolan| Quote: | Soon the screams of the late Heinrich Boll fell silent and for a moment still, before it got back up while twisting and morphing into the beast that tore apart Slaughterhaus's Carcassite in the middle of the USA section of Six Flags Over Texas. "Ugh that coward was pitiful, hardly any flavor at all aside from arrogance and fear." Carcharoth now fell to one-knee once and proclaimed, "Once again as in days of old I am at your service Lord Domino and by extension that of the Obsidian Circle as well."
"Certainly my son but now that you have disposed of that rif-raff there is no need to hide behind pseudonyms," Lord Domino spoke with amusement, "So Fenrir how does it feel to have a body all to yourself once again."
"I like it very much father Loki, I am also glad to see that my sister Hel is here to witness my advent." Carcharoth now identified as Fenrir replied with wicked glee, "I also look forward to creating a new pack of thralls from the Sons of Adam and the Daughters of Eve." At this statement Mistress Nyx clenched her fists but Fenris continued, "Still it is too bad that my brother Jörmungandr is not also here to make it a true family reunion."
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but in Faolan 2| Faolan 2 | Eventually the time came that we knew that a great sacrifice was needed to stop the Great Ones and their allies, knowing that her survival was likely impossible, Queen Venraniel wrote a gaes upon each of our souls. Because the spell that stabilized our spirits would let our souls survive intact and awake after The Sundering was completed, we were charged with several tasks. We were to build up our own power and ability so that we would be able to battle the Great Old Ones and their cults without the need of our armies. We were to gather the survivors of the Western Court and ensure that they did not forget the importance of the Danger that was to come again. We were to gather any allies that we could find and arm them with weapon, tool, and knowledge to fight when the time came. And finally and the most vital order of all if we were to come across any true heirs of the Five Fold Courts, any of the Five Fold Courts, we were to guard them with our lives.
Most of the rest you know as truth is, except that when Dagda came to me for my knowledge on strategy and tactics to battle the Fomorii, I was serving as a Valkyrie under the King Tyr of what is now Helheim and was granted Badb as my partner. During this time I discovered that rather than go to what is now Asia, the Beta had crossed into Jötenheim and had found a home amongst the Jöten and had taken a name- Loki.
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So my question is, will the real Loki please stand up?
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| Re: Faolan Discussion [message #44228 is a reply to message #42977 ] |
Mon, 01 August 2011 22:25 |
Insane Hiker
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This is the first half of Faolan 3, I am working on the second half now and it is coming along at a good clip. I hope to finish it before September, but we will see.
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| Re: Faolan Discussion [message #44233 is a reply to message #44228 ] |
Tue, 02 August 2011 02:04 |
Isodecan
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This is a fun story, although quite a bit more divergent from Canon then might initially appear to be the case based just on events. In particular, it seems like you have the Grand Hall of Sinister Wisdom supplanting the Syndicate and doing all types of paranormals, instead of primarily magic. Still, it has been a fun story so far.
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| Re: Faolan Discussion [message #44236 is a reply to message #44228 ] |
Tue, 02 August 2011 02:38 |
Avatard
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Ok, I am only part of the way through Faolan 2 so please don't stab me if you have covered this, but I have to ask before I forget. There is this bit you have:| Faolan 2 by Insane Hiker | Within room, 213 at the Badrutt's Palace Hotel in Switzerland a man of obviously Scandinavian stock lit a cigarette, another successful mission and three new thralls for his growing army of minions, father in-fact had asked that he enthrall these three personally. Well only one was truly important, he looked down at the three satiated girls sleeping off fun in the sack with him, particularly at main objective of his seductions Connie Goodkind although her friends Covina Walcutt-Scott and Terraline Barre-Church were still welcome bonuses.
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Is this supposed to be Ayla's sister Connie Goodkind? Because if it is she is only supposed to be sixteen and probably at school when this is going on. Not to mention I doubt her security goons would let her go off with this man without VERY through background checks if at all, EVER. Also, would she really be hanging out with a Walcutt? I just don't see this being the most level-headed (i.e. nonasshatish) sister of Ayla's.
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| Re: Faolan Discussion [message #44239 is a reply to message #44233 ] |
Tue, 02 August 2011 03:02 |
Insane Hiker
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Nope just Erzabet's branch, she's a lot more ambitious than most in the Grand Hall and has an end that she is working towards piece by piece. Besides her advantage over the Syndicate is that she is hiding the true size of her organization behind fronts, they don't exactly hire themselves out to others.
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| Re: Faolan Discussion [message #44241 is a reply to message #44236 ] |
Tue, 02 August 2011 03:27 |
Insane Hiker
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D'oh I got Heather and Connie mixed up, I guess I need to re-write 2. As for background check's Carcharoth's documents might be fake but their roots are deep, also he despite what Randi might think he ditched Plagiat a long time ago, who or rather what he is using now will be explained in the second half of Faolan 3.
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| Re: Faolan Discussion [message #44260 is a reply to message #44241 ] |
Tue, 02 August 2011 13:20 |
Insane Hiker
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Rewrite done, it's a good thing it only affected two scenes.
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| Re: Faolan Discussion [message #44362 is a reply to message #44346 ] |
Thu, 04 August 2011 21:51 |
Insane Hiker
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Will do for rewrites, sorry I thought that tails qualify as severe being an extra-limb, I'll fix it.
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| Re: Faolan Discussion [message #44373 is a reply to message #42912 ] |
Fri, 05 August 2011 04:17 |
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Nicky82
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Well, many primates do have a tail, we humans are among the species that have 'lost' it, what was once the tail is now fused in the pelvis bones (even if it seems some humans do have a single vertebra that is not fused, all that is left of the tail in the human race); a GSD that restores the tail requires relatively alterations (most concerning muscles, nerves and blood vessels) compared to having extra mescles AND nerves AND blood vessels AND the changes to the scheleton to accomodate an extra pair of limbs (along the extra bones there are also the joints that join them to the scheleton and the attachments of the muscles needed to operate them) that no vertebrate spiece ever had.
At least this is what I think to be the reason, the only thing that I know for sure is that on the Wiki is stated that Harry Wolfe would qualify as moderate GSD if his condition was due mutation instead of the curse cast on his family.
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| Re: Faolan Discussion [message #44377 is a reply to message #44373 ] |
Fri, 05 August 2011 07:47 |
Insane Hiker
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It' okay, besides I've already made the necessary corrections.
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