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Not With a Whimper [message #44903] Sat, 27 August 2011 17:56 Go to next message
Isodecan  is currently offline Isodecan
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One seriously messed up family, and a good example of what can happen with supers who can't keep it in their pants. Still, a nice look at a story only tangentially related to Whateley.
Re: Not With a Whimper [message #44908 is a reply to message #44903 ] Sat, 27 August 2011 18:21 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Pretty crazy (I retract this statement, this story is fracking psychotic and all of those people need help). Although, if he is a REG-4 he wouldn't be getting cancer, or if he did it would be Regen Cancer which would kill him really quickly.

You did have a lot of problems with POV in that there were several instances of "Beth pours another round" grammar.


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Re: Not With a Whimper [message #44914 is a reply to message #44908 ] Sat, 27 August 2011 19:21 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Oh nuts, I thought I'd got all the grammer. Can you PM me with what needs to be fixed?
Re: Not With a Whimper [message #44919 is a reply to message #44908 ] Sat, 27 August 2011 22:14 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Ok, I am going to see if I can summarize this crazy (awesome?) thing out for my bleeding mind.

There was a mutant dude from WWII named Jason Stanton that married a British mutant without a anti-aging trait who also had Diedrick's named Elizabeth Queen. They had four kids together of which one is a lesbian criminal of some kind named Violet (she is also 80 years old which should put her being born before WWII, but there is no specified time frame for the story), another somehow got into the film/TV business and even has her own show or something (Goodkinds dropped the ball there) named Bethany, a telepath named Cassiopeia, and Diane. All the kids seem to be high class mutants as well.

Now, as the British chick aged and her husband didn't she let him have sexual relationships with a number of women so that he would stay with her. Those relationships spawned some kids including one named Allison (with her own mutant kid Nathan who seems to be about 6-8 which means he manifested REALLY early) who has kalideoscope eyes, a flying unicorn named Justice who lives in Texas, and two other daughters who got at least the hot exemplar package. All of these kids seem to be high class mutants as well (Jason had SUPERDUPER sperm, forever making Captain Condom his bitch)

Eventually the British chick got tired of her old body and somehow got a crazy-arsed-elvish-hotty-cyborg body with blaster arms and glowing red eyes. Apparently Elizabeth is so crazy that people aren't willing to slap the kids around, but not enough to get her admitted somewhere. Oh, and she hunted down and tried to kill the mothers of her husband's other kids.

Jason now has stage four lung cancer from smoking Lucky Strikes (for that bold smooth flavor buy Lucky Strikes) for the past umptine years which his EX-5 trait can't handle anymore. Since he signed up for the army (and we all know how much they respect mutant rights) he will be studied, dissected, and CLONED after his death because all people in the military are organ donors.

Feeling that her philandering husband has already done his duty for his country (and because she really wants to blow shit up) she decides to get her daughters together and team up with the trollop's daughters (who have never known who there father acutally IS) to break him out of Nellis Air Force Base before he is shipped to Area 51. Allison (not being psychotic or stupid) points out that they can just visit him in the hospital instead.

And it pretty much ends there. I do want to say sorry for the REG-4 thing, I thought that it was behind the PK-4, but I guess I read wrong.


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Re: Not With a Whimper [message #44921 is a reply to message #44919 ] Sat, 27 August 2011 22:59 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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No, you read right. You also had a good point. In my original notes I didn't have it in there, and for some reason decided to add it in.

As for the time frame, it's set in the future.

This story involves a lot of characters from the IRC Whateley RP group.

Justice being the most prominent example, though Nate Sr. obviously has a lot of influence.

I made a list of MID cards just to help me keep everyone straight. I'll be tossing those online at some point.
Re: Not With a Whimper [message #44922 is a reply to message #44921 ] Sat, 27 August 2011 23:05 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Oh. And its not done. I'm just polishing up the next bits before posting them.
Re: Not With a Whimper [message #44946 is a reply to message #44922 ] Sun, 28 August 2011 10:32 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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This story is really fucked up. Elizabeth is just fucking mad.


But it is awesome some way.

Thank you for writing.


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Re: Not With a Whimper [message #45738 is a reply to message #44919 ] Tue, 13 September 2011 07:55 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Avatard wrote on Sat, 27 August 2011 22:14
All of these kids seem to be high class mutants as well (Jason had SUPERDUPER sperm, forever making Captain Condom his bitch)


Elizabeth might not have been unaging, but she was still a terrifyingly powerful mutant in her own right- and the mothers of Justice and Allison, at least, were strong mutants themselves.

Jason probably had dozens of kids who weren't powerful enough to be useful for Elizabeth's scheme, though.

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Apparently Elizabeth is so crazy that people aren't willing to slap the kids around, but not enough to get her admitted somewhere.


I think the issue is more that admitting her would require catching her.

[Updated on: Wed, 14 September 2011 00:28]

Re: Not With a Whimper [message #45784 is a reply to message #45738 ] Wed, 14 September 2011 22:40 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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pbkitty wrote on Tue, 13 September 2011 07:55


Elizabeth might not have been unaging, but she was still a terrifyingly powerful mutant in her own right- and the mothers of Justice and Allison, at least, were strong mutants themselves.

Jason probably had dozens of kids who weren't powerful enough to be useful for Elizabeth's scheme, though.


So I put some thought into this, and I decided that I was going to have the Exemplar PK Superman gene complex what have you be active on Jason's X chromosome. His Y chromosome is more or less normal.

Which means that his daughters tend to inherit something like his power. IE High level exemplar levels and some form of psi power.

His SONS on the other hand...

His sons tend to inherit Elizabeth's power, if indeed they get anything at all. And boys being boys, have every bit the tendency to blow themselves up much as Liz did in her youth. And if the pyromania doesn't get them, the various chemical imbalances tend to render most of them less than trustworthy.

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I think the issue is more that admitting her would require catching her.


She was placed under house arrest in the late 70s, after she threatened Paris with the Isle of Wight and then had a stand off with a Nato fleet when they tried to stop her from taking it to Florida to visit her grand children.

However Margret Thatcher granted her a pardon later on, both for her previous service to the crown, and her assistance with the than being planned Falkland Islands campaign.

[Updated on: Wed, 14 September 2011 22:43]

Re: Not With a Whimper [message #46507 is a reply to message #44903 ] Sun, 09 October 2011 07:14 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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...But what about his offspring who changed gender? I know there was at least one of them.
Re: Not With a Whimper [message #47344 is a reply to message #46507 ] Fri, 28 October 2011 21:40 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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You know, I think they're mostly old enough that they didn't catch that wave. TG is supposed to be incredibly rare after all, so only having one gender flip feels like a good ratio.
Re: Not With a Whimper [message #51197 is a reply to message #47344 ] Sun, 08 January 2012 23:07 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Thanks to Talhe for reminding me to post the next update.

And a quick question. I've decided to include the Kimba's in this story line, as a team strong enough to take Violet with federal connections and a strong do good nature.

But, since this is all future speculation, I didn't want to really do so explicitly. I'm limiting myself to using their last names once and not giving them any dialog at all.
Re: Not With a Whimper [message #51239 is a reply to message #51197 ] Mon, 09 January 2012 10:34 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Tsureai wrote on Sun, 08 January 2012 22:07
Thanks to Talhe for reminding me to post the next update.

And a quick question. I've decided to include the Kimba's in this story line, as a team strong enough to take Violet with federal connections and a strong do good nature.

But, since this is all future speculation, I didn't want to really do so explicitly. I'm limiting myself to using their last names once and not giving them any dialog at all.


You are certainly welcome, and I thank you for continuing the fic.

I have to say I'm enjoying the dynamics of Liz's character regarding Jason and his various partners in infidelity. She's clearly torn by the fact that she sees his 'dalliances' as a necessary evil, but can't restrain her violent impulses very well. It's an odd kind of love displayed, but love nonetheless.


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Re: Not With a Whimper [message #51267 is a reply to message #44903 ] Mon, 09 January 2012 17:40 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Interesting cameo of the Kimbettes. Lily having mentored other people implies that "Not With a Whimper" is set several years after Whateley canon (unless Allison is making things up).

And Team Kimba are adults now.

I guess a grown up Tennyo as opponent could anyone make wet her pants...
Re: Not With a Whimper [message #51342 is a reply to message #44903 ] Tue, 10 January 2012 22:01 Go to previous messageGo to previous message
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This story takes place at least 12 years after current story lines.
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